Moriah Leila

Okay, so you asked for us to rip it to shreds and that is exactly what I intend to do. Please don't take anything personal. I really do like your ...

Interesting...Your descriptions of the settings are very vivid and I like how the house is dirty even with maids bustling everywhere. However, I have no idea what time period this ...

“ And aura,” he begins to answer, “is everything. It is the reflection of our souls, our state of mind, our very life. And should be An. Then my mine ...

Your plot is very interesting and I like how everything is overly perfect in Sunnyville. However there are several areas that I think need a little improvement. Number 1: Your ...

Ha I was reviewing this chapter in the chapter four post for some reason..lol. ANyways I have a few nitpicks. Setting: I want more. I know someone has already covered ...

Okay, quick review...I didn't get a chance to read the other critiques so hopefully I don't repeat what has already been covered. Just minor details. I think your character development ...

I only have a short amount of time so I will just focus on one aspect of this chapter that I think needs improvement and then hopefully I will be ...

I really like this chapter. I enjoy how Rachel has come from this timid logical little mouse of a person and now suddenly she is impulsive and strong and emotional. ...

You are pulling me in deeper and deeper. I am so curiuos about Rachel's past and who this elligible bachelor is. Seems there is some sort of past with those ...

Very interesting!! However, I hae to say that I found it really hard to read in present tense. First person is okay, but I had to force myself to read ...

Very good, yet again you have written a story that draws the reader in almost instantly. I have very few suggestions, just a couple nitpicks. Then that would put a ...

I really enjoyed this piece. meg's despair is so real and I absolutely love your descriptions of her paint/artwok/settings etc. It was a very vivid story which i really enjoyed. ...

Yeah!! A new chapter and I am the first to review!! Gripping the handle, I pulled it open and put one foot inside the crude bathroom the men [s]built[/s] had ...

towards the one thing I was drawn to with every fiber of my being. Why is she drawn to the humans so much? It was as if I had stepped ...

I’d never realized the range was this close to our large village-like place. I don't like the wording of village-like place. Maybe, our large wolf village? It was as if ...